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January 23, 2009

http://www.abdeen.com/Poetry/Quills/Mortality.htm

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11 comments

  1. Mortality… very true, for all of us.

    c.m.m.

         by Candlewitch January 23, 2009 at 2:08 am
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  2. Stated very briefly life is short, brevity is the mother of wit, in jokes and in poems.

         by Efracho January 23, 2009 at 8:16 pm
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  3. Now there is a statement to give one pause for thought . Excellent!

         by poewriter57 January 23, 2009 at 10:27 pm
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  4. So very true. What simple and true perspective. Good Poem.

         by Pretend Poet January 24, 2009 at 1:19 am
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  5. Powerful

         by Aseli January 24, 2009 at 6:31 am
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  6. sorry, i dont believe in what youre preaching… but i appreciate your opinion

    i think our time on this planet is quite precious and for the reason that it is our ONLY time. the afterlife is something that i wish i knew were real, but i dont. so sorry,

    thanks for sharing

         by jramey January 24, 2009 at 7:24 pm
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  7. Ah yes, creeping death. Many believe their entire lives are out in front of them, only to meet tragedy and realized it had indeed passed them by. You never know when your gonna go.

    Interesting poem, I enjoyed it.

         by Claymor January 24, 2009 at 7:27 pm
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  8. this is a bit different from you regular style and theme and I hear aging in your voice…have you given up on love and romance?

    I like the train image…like the train once life starts running you can’t stop it or slow it down until it reaches it’s desitney.

    v. well expressed…thank you Hassaan

         by WhiteWings January 25, 2009 at 12:58 pm
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  9. I have always believed that we are here on the earth to learn what we have to to end up in heaven and it will take some time to learn this so we stay hear until this is done; Then we will go to Heaven when we are ready.

    Paula

         by ajpjrok January 25, 2009 at 1:08 pm
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  10. …YES…IT IS SO…AND NO MAN KNOWS WHEN THE END WILL BE SO WE ARE CAUTIONED BY THE WORD OF GOD TO LIVE EACH DAY AS IF IT WERE OUR LAST.

    YOUR THOUGHT PROVOKING WRITE THAT IS FILLED WITH GOOD IMAGERY, IS APPRECIATED. THANKS FOR SHARING AND GOD BLESS.

         by jmbiam January 26, 2009 at 6:31 am
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  11. I understand the sentiment but I can’t get into a smooth or effective flow, no matter how many times I read it.

    Perhaps you could read this aloud in a conversational tone and pay attention to the natural rhythm and revisit the work. Right now i feel as if I am fighting against the structure and pacing each time i work my way through it and at the end I feel more frustrated than anything else.

    Free form poetry is not my forte but there are many on the site who can give you more concrete feedback.

    –Jonathan
    Annoying the world, one person at a time

         by Pugilist January 31, 2009 at 6:38 am
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